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Hehe, bullet, if you like romance-y stuff, you should try Ayumi's work....
Yay-ness! Finally, a Naruto fic!
Okay, I was in a state of awe. That is cool. And I also noticed that people here are more into OCs... some communities actually hate OCs...
I liked it! Sounds like a good beginning. I like that it's set in a different village other than Konoha or Suna. The character interplay is ok too. I think you just need to explore the main character in teh next few parts of the story and you're good to go!
Good luck and May the Force be with you!
~PN
Yays for AF ^^
Hey, awesome story! Naruto fan here too. Can't wait to here more.
Good luck.
-- M.B.Author
Thanks guys!
Yes, there will be more, though not necessarily right after this little scene. I plan on writing on my theory about when they take over the world, what it will be like. Also what if the members that died survived? Orochimaru stayed? So many ideas. So little time XD Battle scenes are really not my specialty...glad to see I haven't bombed out yet XD
~Sumi
Sweet! I was entranced.
(“Who and said what?” he asked.)
That confused me. I couldn't figure out what it meant.
Can't wait to read the continuation!